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CAHSEE ELA 4.1 Writing Strategies. Which of the following would be the most effective way of writing the underlined portion of sentence 16?

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Thank you We sneak No And here's your shmoop du

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jour brought to you by traffic jams Bad will travel

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Also bad on toast A lot of sugar I have

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long past its stillness Look was this the time magazine

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essay of the year This guy won the nobel prize

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All right Which of the following would be the most

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effective way of writing the underlined portion of sentence Sixteen

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Sixteen Right here and here the central and all right

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our narrator is in a poetic mood here We have

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a feeling some serious coffee shop time gave birth to

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this gym The key to getting this question right is

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helping our narrator make her poetic devices consistent in the

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paragraph in question are narrative spends a lot of time

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comparing her thoughts to traffic She keeps it up for

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most of the passage so we'll go ahead and label

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This is an extended metaphor in case you need a

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refresher and extended metaphor is exactly what it sounds like

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It's when a writer compares one thing to another and

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stretches it out for a while sentence sixteen isn't terrible

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but it would be better if the underlined section connected

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with the extended metaphor The paragraph choice is a b

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and c all suggest ways of doing this so we

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feel all right crossing off choice d which tells us

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to leave everything as it is We have a feeling

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that one of these answers is gonna work out well

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choice a tries to replace the underlying section with talk

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of internal car forms We can't go with this option

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though it'd make the paragraph sound redundant repetitive Saying the

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same thing over and over and over again since the

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very next sentence also mentions mental car horns are mental

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car horn used to play the tune to call me

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maybe twenty times a day till we ripped it out

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Option c kind of works when a car starts revving

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it is similar to when our thoughts come back to

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life after a moment of stillness The only thing that's

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revving doesn't give us the same sense of motion that

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the original sentence does Revving car is one that's sitting

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still Even those guys who make their honda civics louder

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on purpose can't rev and ride it same time Thank

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you Closing down anyway The correct answer is b It

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gives us the sense of motion and ease us into

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the extended metaphor without bashing us over the head with

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it We're grateful yesterday we can't across a metaphor that

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gave us a concussion It was upset because we thought 00:02:29.882 --> [endTime] it looked like a simile

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