CAHSEE ELA 2.4 Writing Strategies

CAHSEE ELA 2.4 Writing Strategies. Which is the best way to revise sentence 1?

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and here The potential answers All right looks like it's

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time to make the first sentence a little last wordy

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there's no doubt that it needs some work so we

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could cross out option d right from the start option

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b doesn't look so great either this one's kind of

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a slacker there's more to do here than simply slicing

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the sentence in to check out how hard it is

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to understand the first sentence Now yeah that parenthetical citation

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breaks the sentence up oddly and the final phrase feels

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like it was just thrown on to the end don't

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even get us started on the second sense it still

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feels long and word even if it's been separated from

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the first one Okay let's stop beating up a choice

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b and move on to other options choice see has

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the right idea This sentence is in need of some

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serious rephrasing but unfortunately sees version is majorly awkward like

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when you ask somebody out and she answered by pointing

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out the spinach in your teeth We've been pretty well

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maybe it's not exactly that kind of awkward but it's

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awkward nonetheless soulless choice is going to be our best

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option It makesem smart cuts By taking out that unnecessary

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humble wayside flower boat and the citation that follows its

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concise easy to understand and still manages to pack in

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all the important info So we would like a little

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more info on why a grown man would go around

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calling himself kim for now like why would they do

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that What It sounds like some oxy five cure that 00:01:55.337 --> [endTime] Maybe