CAHSEE ELA 4.4 Writing Strategies

CAHSEE ELA 4.4 Writing Strategies. What is the most effective revision for the underlined part of sentence 8?

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effective revision for the underlined part of sentence Eight and

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hear the potential answers that land back All right let's

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start by revisiting sentenced Ate this one way Can't get

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too friendly on our visit though none of the options

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allow us to leave The senses is so its days

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are numbered Sorry Sentence eight The good editors shows no

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mercy Okay now let's take another look at the options

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They're all kind of similar aren't they Yeah It's like

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that nightmare we have with the hall full of doors

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and we don't know which doors right Fortunately there are

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a couple of clues here For starters we can cut

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choices a nd right off the bat because the word

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actually is too informal for this passage The narrator spends

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a lot of time using heightened highfalutin language He's too

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busy being poetic to stoop to a casual word like

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actually go now we have to decide Between b and

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c This comes down to a battle of words In

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one corner we have tranquil and in the other we

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have at ease ding ding ding Well this sounds like

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the most boring boxing match ever Anyway To decide the

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winner we have to ask ourselves which choice suits the

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tone or situation or meaning better Well after much deliberation

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okay after three seconds we're going to go with choice

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C word tranquil has more of a connotation of stillness

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than at ease does the whole passages about stillness so

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we'd better stick with that theme as best we can

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Also tranquil sounds fancier than at ease like a military

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five so it jibes with the passengers highfalutin tone If

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this passage were a restaurant well we couldn't order chicken 00:01:58.878 --> [endTime] fingers and we definitely need a tie