Texas EOC English 1: 1.7 Editing

written by like george will time magazine guy won the

nobel prize for literature Yeah okay we're done what's The

best way to rewrite sentences eight and nine and here

the potential answers Making it seem just all right home

and we have some problems here Well let's read it

He created cubism which breaks the subject down into shapes

and rearranges them making it seem like you can see

the subject from every angle at once Oh it's awful

sentence nine is a phrase not a full sentence So

it's not allowed out in the world all alone like

a kid is not big enough to walk to school

yet All right well we'll start by crossing off option

d We've already figured out the sentence Nine needs some

help So this one's a freebie just be isn't any

better than he leases original version he created cubism is

a complete sentence with its own subject he and verve

created which breaks the subject down Yeah yeah got it

got it is a fragment like the original number nine

This is a phrase not a complete sentence All right

we're fragment free and choice See But that doesn't mean

it's the right answer Well this option has a bad

case of the misplaced modifiers The whole thing is pretty

convoluted So it's a little hard to tell what the

intention is it Looks like the opening phrase is trying

to describe cubism but as it is it feels like

it's describing the pronoun he because all might have been

miraculously but we doubt you could see him from every

angle all it wants All right we'll answer is correct

All we have to do is use accommodate connect fragment

e sentence nine to sentence eight then we just do

some slight rewarding for clarity's sake And we've got a

complete sentence that shows how cubism works Eat your heart

out picasso Now we've got the know how to take 00:02:10.765 --> [endTime] the cubist world by storm