Texas EOC English 1: 1.7 Editing

CompositionWriting Process
LanguageEnglish Language
Texas EOCEditing
Texas EOC English IEditing

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written by like george will time magazine guy won the

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nobel prize for literature Yeah okay we're done what's The

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best way to rewrite sentences eight and nine and here

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the potential answers Making it seem just all right home

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and we have some problems here Well let's read it

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He created cubism which breaks the subject down into shapes

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and rearranges them making it seem like you can see

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the subject from every angle at once Oh it's awful

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sentence nine is a phrase not a full sentence So

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it's not allowed out in the world all alone like

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a kid is not big enough to walk to school

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yet All right well we'll start by crossing off option

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d We've already figured out the sentence Nine needs some

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help So this one's a freebie just be isn't any

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better than he leases original version he created cubism is

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a complete sentence with its own subject he and verve

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created which breaks the subject down Yeah yeah got it

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got it is a fragment like the original number nine

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This is a phrase not a complete sentence All right

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we're fragment free and choice See But that doesn't mean

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it's the right answer Well this option has a bad

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case of the misplaced modifiers The whole thing is pretty

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convoluted So it's a little hard to tell what the

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intention is it Looks like the opening phrase is trying

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to describe cubism but as it is it feels like

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it's describing the pronoun he because all might have been

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miraculously but we doubt you could see him from every

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angle all it wants All right we'll answer is correct

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All we have to do is use accommodate connect fragment

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e sentence nine to sentence eight then we just do

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some slight rewarding for clarity's sake And we've got a

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complete sentence that shows how cubism works Eat your heart

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out picasso Now we've got the know how to take 00:02:10.765 --> [endTime] the cubist world by storm