Texas EOC English 1: 1.7 Editing
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written by like george will time magazine guy won the
nobel prize for literature Yeah okay we're done what's The
best way to rewrite sentences eight and nine and here
the potential answers Making it seem just all right home
and we have some problems here Well let's read it
He created cubism which breaks the subject down into shapes
and rearranges them making it seem like you can see
the subject from every angle at once Oh it's awful
sentence nine is a phrase not a full sentence So
it's not allowed out in the world all alone like
a kid is not big enough to walk to school
yet All right well we'll start by crossing off option
d We've already figured out the sentence Nine needs some
help So this one's a freebie just be isn't any
better than he leases original version he created cubism is
a complete sentence with its own subject he and verve
created which breaks the subject down Yeah yeah got it
got it is a fragment like the original number nine
This is a phrase not a complete sentence All right
we're fragment free and choice See But that doesn't mean
it's the right answer Well this option has a bad
case of the misplaced modifiers The whole thing is pretty
convoluted So it's a little hard to tell what the
intention is it Looks like the opening phrase is trying
to describe cubism but as it is it feels like
it's describing the pronoun he because all might have been
miraculously but we doubt you could see him from every
angle all it wants All right we'll answer is correct
All we have to do is use accommodate connect fragment
e sentence nine to sentence eight then we just do
some slight rewarding for clarity's sake And we've got a
complete sentence that shows how cubism works Eat your heart
out picasso Now we've got the know how to take 00:02:10.765 --> [endTime] the cubist world by storm