Texas EOC English 2: 2.1 Revision
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on All right we're done Jenny would like to revise
sentence to in order to create a more effective and
sophisticated introduction Which of the following is the best revision
and hear the angels Okay a lot of hero sandwiches
going on to make sure jenny's new sentence to is
the best it can be We'd probably better take another
look The first sense is well so let's do that
All right one My grandfather walter james was an american
hero of the world war two generation great And two
you could say he was a hero for more than
one reason All right Put together these sentences field choppy
and vague It takes jenny several more paragraphs to explain
why her granddad was a hero for more than one
reason Right And it's Never good to leave readers in
the dark like that For one they get bored And
two they might trip on stuff You know we know
that happening All right Choices just as bad as the
original sense Well actually it's worse Not only does it
not tell us why walter was a hero for other
reasons It also starts with the phrase and furthermore just
weird and awkward See makes all the same mistakes as
a it doesn't give us the intel we need on
walter and it's Pretty awkward to boot We have to
have a better idea About how this whole hero thing
works This's so vague that for all we know walter
might have been able to turn into the hulk Be
kind of cool though Might be actually gives us the
info we need when it tells us that walter is
also a hero to him family But once again the
senses well awkward man there's More awkwardness going around here
than our first middle school dances Joyce d is the
best answer we've got it's not awkward and tells us
about walter's hero status with his family It turns out
it's because he was a dedicated blob Uh bad We
were hoping he was the hope I would be really 00:02:23.28 --> [endTime] told heather that is home Oh snap