Texas EOC English 2: 3.2 Revision

on dh digested it Which of the following represents the

best revision to sentence six and hear the pendulum Sentence

six his issue is that it goes right into the

information about stalin without giving us a transition from the

material about hitler So that's just a jarring What we

need is a sentence that takes us from the horrors

of hitler to the terrors of stalin in a nice

and easy way Hard to imagine such a thing is

possible Yeah but let's give it a shot will be

makes an attempt to do this but the phrasing is

awkward and all over the place There's just got to

be a choice that's more straight forward than in this

mess right here Well option a is straightforward but it

makes for a really awkward transition Simply throwing the word

also at the beginning of the sentence isn't going to

smooth out this bumpy ride Well see sort of works

let's read it to compare hitler to stalin Joseph stalin

was the dictator of the ussr now russia who ruled

with an iron fist But the phrase to compare hitler

to stalin is a clunky way of transitioning anytime we

outright say what we're doing on a structural level or

calling attention to the fact that we're not going To

sound all that smooth would we start a new paragraph

by saying to begin a new paragraph No we just

begin a new paragraph Writing an essay is just like

dating and always basically smooth All right all right Choice

dee is the right answer It clearly transitions from hitler

to stalin while comparing the two dictators most famous wrongs

Now that's smooth the sentence structure not evil dictator stuff 00:01:45.856 --> [endTime] I kill you