Texas EOC English 2: 3.2 Revision

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on dh digested it Which of the following represents the

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best revision to sentence six and hear the pendulum Sentence

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six his issue is that it goes right into the

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information about stalin without giving us a transition from the

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material about hitler So that's just a jarring What we

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need is a sentence that takes us from the horrors

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of hitler to the terrors of stalin in a nice

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and easy way Hard to imagine such a thing is

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possible Yeah but let's give it a shot will be

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makes an attempt to do this but the phrasing is

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awkward and all over the place There's just got to

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be a choice that's more straight forward than in this

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mess right here Well option a is straightforward but it

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makes for a really awkward transition Simply throwing the word

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also at the beginning of the sentence isn't going to

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smooth out this bumpy ride Well see sort of works

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let's read it to compare hitler to stalin Joseph stalin

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was the dictator of the ussr now russia who ruled

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with an iron fist But the phrase to compare hitler

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to stalin is a clunky way of transitioning anytime we

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outright say what we're doing on a structural level or

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calling attention to the fact that we're not going To

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sound all that smooth would we start a new paragraph

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by saying to begin a new paragraph No we just

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begin a new paragraph Writing an essay is just like

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dating and always basically smooth All right all right Choice

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dee is the right answer It clearly transitions from hitler

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to stalin while comparing the two dictators most famous wrongs

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Now that's smooth the sentence structure not evil dictator stuff 00:01:45.856 --> [endTime] I kill you