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Select the best version of the italicized part of the sentence. If you think the original sentence is best, choose the first answer.

Benito, Chu, and Paulo were eating supper together when, choking on a French fry, he began to cough.


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Okay see Writing editors Here we go Another question for

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you colleges Or read the sense Benito chu and paulo

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were eating supper together when choking on a french fry

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He began to cough Okay all kinds of wrong in

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this sense So well anyone know the heimlich start there

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All right Although on closer inspection it might be helpful

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to know who needs it the most The problem with

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this sense is that we don't know which got to

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grab the ambiguous pronoun he could refer to any one

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of the three dudes sitting around on this dinner table

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gorging themselves way too fast as it turns out paulo's

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the one choking on a delicious golden stick of goodness

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with salt on it As with all writing we want

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the answer choice that's the simplest and most concise So

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it's gotta be c when paulo began to cough from

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choking on a french fry right that completes it best

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by far simpler construction is better than the one with

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an extra claws d right there that shifts the verb

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tense from were eating too has choked so it's awkward

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correct answer will specify the person who's replaced by the

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pronoun he so well That takes care of a nbc 00:01:11.432 --> [endTime] that's It it's safer shmoop and we're heimlich there

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