ACT English 1.3 Organization
ACT English: Organization Drill 1, Problem 3. Can you find the correct transition?
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though something else happened.
So we're looking for the transition that helps get across the idea that something a bit surprising
(A) is incorrect because "while" signals that two events happened simultaneously.
"Had won" is in the past perfect tense, which indicates that something happened in the past
before something else did...(there was a whole time sequence there)...
...and which means that the events in question couldn't be happening simultaneously. "While"
is all kinds of wrong. That is, unless some kind of multi-dimensional
time warp is occurring. Seems highly unlikely unless you're playing with the "Big Bang" guys.
(B) is incorrect because "unless" sets up a conditional relationship.
As we said before, this sentence isn't trying to show how one thing is caused by another
Wording like, "She knew she was going to be upset unless she won first prize," would make
sense, but it's unfortunately not an option here.
Our girl is upset even though she won, so choice (B) is nixed.
(C) is incorrect because "whether" is usually used to state alternative possibilities.
"She was upset because she didn't know whether or not she'd won first prize," would be an
In the sentence at hand, however, we know that she definitely won first prize and was
definitely upset. There are no variables here, making (C) a no-go.
Choice (D) is what we've been looking for.
The transition word "although" correctly establishes the contrast between the two ideas, and we're
left to wonder why this girl would be upset, despite the fact that she won.
Somebody should tell her there's nothing worse than a sore winner.