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PSAT 1.19 Writing Narrative Walkthrough

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Lorraine and here's your shmoop du jour brought to you

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by outdoor lighting which is a really disrespectful way to

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refer to the sun are checking the following passage understand

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of airline national park service and government night sky friendly

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All right well how would you change the underlying portion

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below if it all that people who are and here

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the potential answers suspense killing me We're big on saving

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energy around here In fact as soon as we're done

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with this video we're going to take a nice long

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nap You're welcome earth let's Check out the sentence That's

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going to be a thorn in our side this time

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people can say farm or energy by employing night sky

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friendly principles and by the people who are using a

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more efficient lightbulb At first read this sentence feels more

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awkward than a handful of gelatin Seriously why didn't we

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put this stuff in the bowl Okay but why does

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the sentence feel awkward Well we're dealing with a comparative

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phrase here In other words we're talking about two ways

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people can save energy both of which start with the

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word by in this sentence On one hand we've got

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employing Night sky friendly principles And on the other hand

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we've got the people who are using a more efficient

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lightbulb Wait what the first is a method of reducing

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energy while the second refers to the people who are

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using an alternate method There's no alignment there So our

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comparison is kaput within crash days tomorrow What about be

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others who are others People Same thing we need a

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more balanced seesaw to make this sentence work So sorry

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yonkers We're gonna have to ask that you run along

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and play with your little piggy path Option c suggests

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the energy saved hoof We suggest you don't even read

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aloud the sentence created by inserting that phrase your brain

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might start hemorrhaging it's still not another method of saving

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energy So the search continues well as it turns out

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it's best just to delete the underlying portion entirely without

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it we've got people khun say farm or energy by

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employing night sky friendly principles then by using a more

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if efficient lightbulb Using a more efficient lightbulb is a

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method of saving energy so it completes our seesaw and

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gives us a comparative phrase that's in perfect working order

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d is the one we want okay naptime And to

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save a bit more energy we're not even going to

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make a joke in this video In fact we're not 00:02:15.998 --> [endTime] even going to say goodbye Oh

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