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Texas EOC English 2: 3.1 Revision 168 Views
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Thank you We sneak in and here's your shmoop too
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sure brought to you by grim reality of those people
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who went to med school and then found out how
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little they'd make as pediatricians Yeah but they're doing good
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for the world But i am a lot All right
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Are we skim in maria's dreams here let's See what
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maria wants to do with the world when she has
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four hundred thousand dollars in debt Okay maria would like
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to make her thesis stating in sentences One two three
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clearer and more effective Which is the best way for
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her to do this And here the potential answers graduate
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from I want to be a doctor All right so
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we've got three disconnected senses that need to become one
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concise thesis statement Somehow we've got to get these sentences
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Teo mingle Maybe a potluck dinner How about that Or
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we'll chop out some words and stick them all back
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together in a way that makes sense Yeah That's Better
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Okay well a makes an attempt to do that When
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i graduate from high school i will want to be
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a pediatrician And for that i will attend college and
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study medicine It's way too wordy And to be really
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just plain awkward it goes for this weird slam dunk
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but falls on its face Trashcan full of dirty diapers
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Not good All right well see isn't going to make
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steam either Once again the wording is awkward Sorry See
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Better luck next time senses joyce bea is concise which
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is great I want to be a doctor and therefore
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i plan to attend college and study medicine But it's
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a little too concise leaves out some stuff We need
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the part about maria specifically wanting to be a pediatrician
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Otherwise that thesis is incomplete He is the right answer
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I have always wanted to be a pediatrician So after
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high school i plan to attend college and study medicine
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and then go heavily into debt Actually that we added
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anyway this sentence concisely tells us that maria wants to
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be a pediatrician and gives us the steps she's going
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to take to be one Gonna be a lot of
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work costs a lot of money But one day helping
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the shrieking snotty bratty children in the world will make 00:02:01.038 --> [endTime] it all worthwhile Buy him a lot
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