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...they'll send him to the guillotine for his wordiness and redundancy.
When we want to get someone's attention or sound important, we sometimes shoehorn
extra words into our sentences. We get wordy.
Redundancy is a kind of wordiness. It involves saying the same thing in a sentence more than
once, and sometimes in a different way.
While wordiness and redundancy can be annoying to listen to...
...they are really annoying to encounter in written sentences.
For example, when Ms. Razzle the science teacher puts a note on a lab assignment that reads,
"It is absolutely essential that students not mix Chemical A with Chemical B, inasmuch
as that would cause a massive explosion"...
...she's guilty of wordiness.
The word "essential" doesn't need to be preceded by "absolutely"...
...and Ms. Razzle could have used "since" or "because" instead of "inasmuch as".
When Ms. Doe the cook puts a sign up at the beginning of the lunch line that reads,
"Owing to the fact that we made too much broccoli-spinach-and-cheese casserole today,
go ahead and take two helpings"...
...she's guilty of wordiness...
...not to mention crimes against vegetables and cheddar.
The phrase "owing to the fact" could be replaced with "because"...
...and that "go ahead" could be excised from Ms. Doe's sign altogether.
When Mr. Moe the history teacher puts in his syllabus, "The required midterm book
report has a required length of five pages"...
...he's guilty of redundancy.
A redundancy-free sentence might read, "The midterm book report must be five pages long."
When Mr. Yoe the English teacher leaves a note on the whiteboard that reads, "The
writing assignment for the day is to write a poem about writing"...
...he, too, is guilty of redundancy.
He might have written, "Today's assignment is to compose a poem about writing."
When Ms. Johnson the PE teacher...writes in her journal that the reason
she loves Thanksgiving break is because she doesn't have to even think about work...
...she's also guilty of redundancy.
A redundancy-free sentence would be rewritten to exclude either "the reason" or "is
because", as these two sets of words mean the same thing.
Wordiness and redundancy are easy to avoid. Just look for those extra words or phrases
that muddy up the construction or the meaning of a sentence...
...and snip-snip those suckers.
Now, if only Mr. Zazzles would learn that using unnecessary words to announce holiday
math homework does not make that homework less awful... or his students less vengeful...