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PSAT 1.1 Writing Diagnostic. How should the underlined portion be changed in the passage, if at all?

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PSAT 1.14 Writing Diagnostic. Should the writer make the addition here?

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00:00

Thank you We sneak and here's your smoke too Sure

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brought to you by prison sentences considering where the inmates

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spend all their time there Basically compound senses are checking

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this passage Sorry Damming ons Yeah we've read this really

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sad What happened This pork out all right We're skimming

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skimming on scamming And we're done at this point the

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writer's considering adding the following phrase between money and to

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her sotomayor's instructions Should the writer make the addition here

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I don't hear the potential answers Why wait edition When

00:41

did this become a math problem If they start asking

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us to put all this stuff in or three by

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three matrix we're gonna lose it all right We can

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rest easy No need for us to pull our calculators

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out of hiding this questions simply saying that the author

00:53

of the passage has a few words surrounded by m

00:56

dash is that they think might go nicely here But

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will they Well let's read a little more of this

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part of passage so we could get our bearing There

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was just one problem The nun had little money of

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her own and couldn't afford all the advance fees so

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she borrowed money from family and friends in puerto rico

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and pennsylvania and then wire the money to various locations

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in the atlantic city area Okay so we're talking about

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sticking the new content right here between money and two

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does that make sense Does it add anything to the

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existing content Are we in danger of running out of

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print a rink if we keep making this thing longer

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All good questions be suggests that yes it's a good

01:35

idea because it introduces a new idea that will become

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relevant in the next paragraph on ly if you're reading

01:41

this passage backwards we were told right off the bat

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that this soda mayer was a shady guy to the

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max adding this new verbiage doesn't tell us anything we

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don't already know so b can't be right the sea

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have it right don't says no the writers shouldn't added

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because it contradicts the main idea of the sentence Well

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that's not true either We already know that nun didn't

02:02

just wake up this morning and on a whim start

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hounding friends and family for funds everything she's doing she's

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doing because so tamar has asked her to so no

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Contradiction here What about d No because it interrupts the

02:15

sentence with irrelevant information Isn't your relevant though well it's

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actually important to the story that so tomorrow is behind

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it all Otherwise you've just got a renegade nun who

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might need to take off three or four weeks to

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work on our mental health So no the suggested words

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aren't your relevant as it turns out it's a totally

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excellent idea to add them Nice work writer Whoever you

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are as option a says it introduces information that is

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relevant to the sense although we might be able to

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guess that sotomayor instructed her specifically to wire money to

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some places in atlantic city adding language to make that

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idea perfectly clear can't be a bad thing Let's just

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thank our lucky stars We don't have to count up

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all the places she wired money to We're already turned

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off the mast side of our brain for the day

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