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Think about how you would rewrite the following sentences according to the directions given, and then choose the best answer for each. Keep in mind that your revision should not change the meaning of the original sentence.

Connecting the Atlantic Ocean to the Mediterranean Sea


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All right yes i writing editor people Here we go

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Another questions The strait of gibraltar is a narrow passage

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of water that connects the atlantic ocean to the mediterranean

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sea and runs between spain and morocco were rewriting with

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this thing to start us off connecting the atlantic ocean

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to the mediterranean sea comma Everything What What happens Well

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this rewritten sentence starts with a description of connecting the

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atlantic ocean to the mediterranean sea So the first question

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should be what connects these two bodies of water Well

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the answer is actually the strait of gibraltar So that's

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how the next part of the rewritten sentence should start

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now let's look back the original sense right here What

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additional information that we need to provide Well the sentence

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tells us both that the strait of gibraltar is a

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narrow passage of water and that it runs between spain

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and morocco While that makes the answer with is the

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best choice So there we go it's be the strait

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of gibraltar is like connecting the atlantic ocean to the

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mediterranean sea The strait of gibraltar is a blob Blob

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blob Okay we'll want to mention that it's a narrow

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passage of water first right Otherwise the reader will have

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to just imagine what runs between spain and morocco A

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river a camel and escaped pamplona bowl Yeah b c

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don't eliminate the strait of gibraltar entirely otherwise don't you

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leave behind a wake of confused rears and hey andy

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So uh that's it The answer is b strain Gibraltar 00:01:29.642 --> [endTime] is shmoop Yeah

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